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Caught
Author: woodsman's game
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(Added on Oct 21, 2003)
(This month 9671 readers) (Total 19131 readers) |
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She gets what she fantasized about, from whom she least expected would fulfill her dreams. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Oct 23, 2003 |
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I agree in particular with Alex Gragi. On the surface this story has a plot like a good many stories floating through cyberspace. The wife is bad, the husband gets angry, there is a hand spanking, then the belt is used. The wife who has displeased her husband is then taken to a special place where she is bound and appliances are applied to her most sensitive parts and she is given a sound trashing. Punishments alternates alternate with sex. So why the high rating.<br><br>Most of the stories with this plot are dry and lifeless. This story lives. Now part of the reason why it lives are the technical aspects that Alex starts off with. Certainly wall to wall errors in spelling and simple grammar are galling. But the author does a couple of great things to bring life to the story.<br><br>First, the touch with the wife recording her fantasies on the computer and the husband reading them. Excellent.<br>Second, the husband and wife are physically described in a real way, not idealized. This brings you in there.<br>There is an attempt, not fully realized, but a real attempt, to describe the surroundings. I could almost see the post in the basement with the scrap of rug in front of it. I could almost visualize the saw horses in the slightly dingy, disorganized basement.<br>Some of the scenes have good visual appeal. The full figured woman bound over the saw horse, broad behind spread out and a prime target for punishment. The stripes and welts beginning to appear on the ample thighs. Not bad.<br>The sensations of the woman being chastised are better described than usual and an attempt is made to record her reactions to them.<br>Lastly, the story has a clearly defined ending. And that ending has a bit of a wry twist associated with it.<br>These are the things that separate this story from 95% of the others including the previous effort by this author.<br><br>I would really like to meet these characters again. I would suggest involving the wife more in her punishment. Perhaps a session with the switch is in order. She is forced to go out into the woods one evening at dusk, barefoot and clad only in her nightgown. She must cut half a dozen switches and bring them back home. Then she sits in the kitchen. While she cleans the bark off, preparing the switches for her discipline, she thinks about her upcoming ordeal.
Then down to the basemen. She should fasten the restraints to her wrists, ankles and knees. She is then bent over the saw horse and secured. Her buttocks and thighs are subjected to a thorough marking with the switches she has just prepared. It is pain of a type she has not experienced before. Followed of course by anal penetration and a thorough cleaning of the master's penis by oral sex. Perhaps she is bouund to the post and her large breasts subjected to the switch. Perhaps she is again placed in the diaper position except now her inner thighs and perineum are switched until bloody. Then her husband uses his tongue and lips to bring her to repeated climax by application to the welted skin and genitals. What was the offense that justified this - Read the next episode.
Go for it. Lots of color, lots of mood, lots of visual details. Let us know what she is thinking, what she is feeling and what are her fantasies.
Good Luck (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Fox
(Edit) (Oct 28, 2003)
- Heh heh, e e norcod, I think you just wrote the sequel. Wonderful work, both of you, woodsman'sgame and e e norcod!
- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Dec 4, 2003)
- Thanks for your review and helpful suggestions, e.e.norcod. Umm, want to write Chapter 2 with me? Your ideas are very good. <grin>
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Oct 23, 2003 |
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What can I say? This a wonderful insight into a loving bdsm relationship. And... no typos, no spellos, no nothing to distract a reader from a great read. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Dec 4, 2003)
- Thank you, Alex.
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| Reviewer:
cyndylu
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Oct 22, 2003 |
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Loved it, have had a similar fantasy and am happy to see it in print! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Dec 4, 2003)
- Thank you for taking the time to review and thank you for your comments.
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