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Happy Birthday Bitch
Author: forcer
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(Added on Jan 23, 2001)
(This month 20334 readers) (Total 60774 readers) |
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A surprise party for his girlfriend and she were really... surprised. gang rape, ws, torture,good stuff. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (4/10) |
Average
Rating: (4/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 2, 2004 |
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got real lost in it, seemd like you want to set it up more then do the story,, it was ok, then you suddenly swtiched view of the story Also in the story line it says "Good Stuff" never found any of it (4/10)
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Reviewer:
lee |
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Apr 1, 2001 |
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read better not much though (6/10)
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Reviewer:
sandy brown |
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Feb 4, 2001 |
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not bad-very kinky (7/10)
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Reviewer:
B |
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Jan 27, 2001 |
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Childish characters, difficult to follow the action, poor grammar.
Never could figure out how she was positioned. (2/10)
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Reviewer:
LM |
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Jan 23, 2001 |
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I must agree with my feloow reader. The grammar and laguage use is not of an acceptable level. It appears there was little thought and story devolopment. Even though this is a fantasy the fantsy seems far fetched. As always, Please feel frr to contact me. (3/10)
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Reviewer:
mm |
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Jan 23, 2001 |
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The use of grammer and text, make it almost unreadable. (3/10)
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Reviewer:
hyphen 666 |
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Jan 23, 2001 |
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Too short, too much build-up and not enough details. Better luck next time. (4/10)
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