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Voyeur de la nuit
Author: l'etranger
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(Added on Feb 11, 2004)
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A man has it all, loses some and then somehow decides it all will be different. He finds he is developing a taste for the 'different', or what he was previously unaccustomed to. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
(Edit) |
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Feb 19, 2004 |
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Hmmm! Same rating as bdsmbill's but for slightly different reasons. I agree with the author that there is nothing better than to leave a segment of a story dangling up there in the air, allowing trhe reader to fill in with their fantasies before the author resumes the story in a later posting. Or never fills it in. A slow build is essential to a really good serial.
My problem with the story is anticipatory. So far this story reads like the average run of the mill male fantasy, riff. Competent but not outstanding. Until things develope further my rating remains, good, was worth reading but not great. Now, Natalie, the spoiled bitch, is obviously in need of some attitude adjustment. This leaves open development in a lot of different directions.
As the story develops, the ratings often change. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
L'étranger
(Edit) (Feb 20, 2004)
Thanks E.E.
One thing I've realised it's not an easy task to write erotica in any form. I wanted to capture the run of the mill male thought process, or rather the moment of transition between the 'standard' sex type urge and that of the darker variety.
The slow build did concern me, but at the same time adding hard action after the opening left me in a dilemma as well.
But yes, many directions that I'm plodding through at the moment.
:)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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Well, this was beginning to get hot, and then it abruptly ended. Too bad. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
L'étranger
(Edit) (Feb 12, 2004)
- Thanks for the review, much appreciated. I wanted to start it off like that, that way terminating it at that spot left the reader 'in the middle' of it. This does not mean it terminates there, at present there are a few more directions it can take, I am in the middle of deciding on the direction.
It doesn't end there however.
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