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Trained Slut
Author: ric
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(Added on Sep 20, 2004)
(This month 65826 readers) (Total 89945 readers) |
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Master purchased me when I was a baby. I have known only a life of servitude.I'm used daily, and I love every second. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 28, 2005 |
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very nice concept anfd the synosis make you want to read it (9/10)
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chksng19
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Sep 23, 2004 |
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The story surprised me: I was expecting something else, I guess. The author says he went a little crazy with this one, and all I can do is agree. Yup, it sure is crazy.
Agree with the editing comment Rocky left; if you're not 100% certain you've got the right word, either look it up or have someone read-edit for you. No big thing, but it does distract those too fussy (like me, I guess).
Leaving the last image (waking up inside the elephant) out, it's an ok story. Could use a few laughs. That image of getting her inside the elephant makes the reader go away with an attitude of, "Ah, bulls**t!" instead of , "Wierd story!" which might be preferable.
Don't stop writing, though. It is truly unusual. (5/10)
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Rocky
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Sep 22, 2004 |
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Okay...the author obviously used a spell checker, however..."witch is my favorite," should "which is my favorite." "Witch" refers to a person who rides broomsticks. Same thing with "ads" versus "adds." I don't know how you "ad" something, unless you call the classified advertising department of the newspaper. "Are destination," should have been "our destination."
A reasonable, if fairly far-fetched premise, which could have a lot of promise if it were not for the poor choice of homonyms. (5/10)
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Optimus Prime
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Sep 22, 2004 |
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The only thing I personally would have changed is her age.
16 is more to my personal likeing.
Other than that, awesome story!
OP (8/10)
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