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A Visit from Daddy
Author: Lex Ludite
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(Added on Sep 25, 2004)
(This month 108743 readers) (Total 187097 readers) |
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While mother is away at the sanitarium indulging her masochistic tendencies, she ships slave "daddy" to her daughter for a visit. The letters from the daughter as well as photographs sent from the sanitarium chronicle the goings on that occur in both places as daughter and her friends seek to severely modify daddy's sexual behavior and mother seeks to lose a significant portion of her body weight. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Stepahanie Von Essen
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Jan 25, 2006 |
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An excellant story which follows two related paths. The story of the mother is far more interesting and it would make a great story on its own when more details are added.
The concept of the mother who is 1.65m and 50 kg and who goes to a fat farm is fascinating. She easily could have another 10-12 kilos whipped off until she was absolutely anorexic. Placing her in a suana for a marathon session was a wonderful touch adding authenticity. The various devices and procedures that are used would be another great story. Submissives look their best when they are starved rail thin.
Her further punishment at other institutions is a very nice method of progresing the story. I like the concept of stretching her on the rack progressively "as a 12 course meal".
Overall a great story from a frequent erotic contributor. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Feb 12, 2006)
- Your observations are most appreciated, as well as the fact that you have chosen this story to be your maiden review. Currently I have resumed work on this story and expect to be posting more of it very soon on a site to be determined. I am most impressed by your initial offering, the polishing technique demonstrates an imagination that is fresh and very creative. This should serve you well in your future offerings.
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Stepahanie Von Essen
(Edit) (Feb 13, 2006)
- You are so kind to remember my small vignette about the Baroness. I really look forward to your continuation of your story. I am sure you have many ingenious ways her to work her buns off at the fat farm.
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Aug 16, 2005 |
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The sci fi involved really lost me. The author had an excellent story going before that part of the story. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Aug 17, 2005)
- First of all, thanks for taking the time to share your view of this highly experimental piece. You are not the only reviewer who has expressed being uncomfortable with where this story appears to be going, and the forces that are now driving it. Let me say that there is no sci fi involved in what is occurring. It's more like a horror fantasy, or perhaps even a modern version of being possessed by dark forces with their own unearthly agenda, akin to your classic ghost story,but with a twist, because this is strictly experimental and I'm pulling out all the stops.
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| Reviewer:
pejanon
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Jul 26, 2005 |
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Letters mode works here very well giving it a bit archaich mood. Loved 'concered comments' about mom and reports on Daddy's progress - much betters than doing long and probabaly boring scenes.
I know that stories tend to develop mind of their own, but please do you know where is this going? It kind of wandered off..
7/26/05 Seems I wasn't clear in above 'review' so here goes ...
The leitmotif of this story is change (switching?). It comes up quite often in this author's stories.
Opening letters created a feeling of being in scalding hot locked sauna illuminated just by occasional flash of IR strobe. Incredible. Then the letters grew longer. Great. Circumstances change, charters change (character development? A lot of it here although 'development' is used in VERY broad sense.) Story and charters are moving along just fine.
Than a Leux ex Machina rises its head in form of that ... DONG (for want of better word). The idea of fountain of, ahem, youth in form of that THING is great but I felt that it dropped from ANOTHER parallel universe. Especially since it is a main plot twister. (On the other hand, story hinged on cock! yay!) A bump or a twist?
Characters are now twirling around and changing, changing changing and building up - hopefully - towards shattering climax.
Mothers saga is just great. Could've been story by itself, but of course it is very supportive sub-plot and the magic is in telling. (Can't wait to see how the author manages to bring it off WITHOUT loosing the letters format.
Oh the story is hilarious, too (Mother, how could you?!) (This reviewer spilled hot coffee in his lap laughing and Messrs. "Graves, Mordant, Merciless and
Diapsid" will contact the author about it.)
So this is either a involved allegory of switching or another dose of usual Lex Ludite crazines. Why not both? "So where is this story going." <grin>
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thanks for your positive review. As far as where it is going, it should be obvious by now. Daddy is growing stronger and the mother is growing weaker; her daughter has already become just another of Daddy's very dependent slaves. The conclusion should be quite apparent. Look at it this way, it will end with one big, but not so happy family being created. The fun is in getting there, as you shall see. Further chapters have been delayed due to the need to catch up on some of the other stories I have going. Don't get too impatient, it's on my list of things to do.
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| Reviewer:
Cokera
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Dec 7, 2004 |
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I really found it to be a very dark and excitingly interesting piece. It held my attention and made my darkest fantasys stir.
Thanks! I know need to look up other works by you and give them a read also. Bravo! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Dec 12, 2004)
- I am delighted that you enjoyed this very experimental effort. It combines a number of themes that run through much of my stories, but is done in a slightly different manner, the use of letters. It appears as if my little orphan has been adopted by many readers.
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| Reviewer:
Sui Lerua
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Sep 29, 2004 |
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These ratings - at least until mine - reminded me of those tricky spares I'm often left with when I go bowling. There's nothing like a split-pin story to pique my curiosity!
I enjoyed this story, though more as a piece of writing that as something that pushed my buttons. It's sharply written and generally entertaining, enough to bring out a few nasty smiles in this reader. Lex, keep up the good work and keep exploring. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
darksource
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Sep 28, 2004 |
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For an person who is so very critical of others storie written by other authors, (i have read some of your other reviews) you are in the need of learninig tolerance, reading highlight magazines to my 5 yyear old was more entertaining then this story if that is was it is supposed to be. I have read on the web what an outstanding author you are, how everyone applauds your writing ability.
If this is the very best you can do, in the future please don't, don't waste everones time,and web space with mindless dribble, and other assorted nothings, you may be a great human being but as an author at least for erotica you severly lack any literary talent at all, i do not claim to me a master of writing, i have never written any erotic storie for posting anywhere, but i freely admit i do not have the talent to do so but i am at least person enough to admit i have no writing talent, i preffer to review stories, not garbage like this
I found nothing erotic aboutthe story at all, which is one major aspect of erotica. Like a car wiyjout a battery or a distributor cap, it may be the greatest car in the world but like your story it is going nowwhere
I found nothing erotic, entertaining about the story, i read it as slow, bland, uninspiring dribble, my concern is that you will continue to pollute this wonderful web site with this type story, if of course you want to call it that
i found nothing at all in the story erotic to the point of anything much higher then my rating.
My intent was NOT to broadside you with my comments, but rather point out my incredable disapointment after some of thew other tremendous stories you have posted. But every writer has a bead story, i simply hope this is not going to be your trend, and you will enlighten all of us and return to the erotic writing for you have in the past so we may once again enjoy your erotica as it is entened to be enjoyed
I have read many of your other stories, yes you do offer a broad aray of subjects and i realize that not all stories by any one author will appeal to all, some stories tend to be more specialized in nature, as this one apparently was meant to be, which is fine
you can not be expected to appeal to all reviewers all the time which i full understand and agree with
when i did read some of your other submissions, i wondered how could a author who is raived about by most reviewers on this web site anyway, be so wrong about so many stories
I will be curious to see on your next posting if you still offer the same dribble or if you offer a story of erotic intent, erotic achievment, i look forward to seeing what you post next, hopefully you will improve on what they have written in the past and not iffer dribble or story to such a specialized group of readers and reviewers
(2/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Sep 26, 2004)
- I am quite taken aback by your broadside, but you are certainly entitled to your opinion. However you might have had the common courtesy to give me examples of why this little effort evoked such strong feelings within you.
- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Sep 27, 2004)
- If I read you correctly, you did not like the content at all. That's fine; it was not meant to appeal to a broad audience. I have been writing long enough now to realize that unless I want to be just a one trick pony, I have to branch out into other, more challenging areas. This is one of many that I am currently exploring. If you look at what I've been posting lately, you'll see what I am talking about.
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| Reviewer:
sissyslave
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Sep 27, 2004 |
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i quite liked it and hope the next part(s) are soon to follow (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
warren_Z
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Sep 26, 2004 |
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As Lex is one of the most prolific writers and reviewers on this site, it is hard to keep up with all of the material he provides us. I must say that "A Visit From Daddy" was shocking, provcative, and I loved the correspondence format.
I can't believe that darksource's review was was serious; in fact, it sounds as if he has a bone to pick - which has nothing to do with the story.
I give this story a 10 on its merit, and not because of the terribly unfair review by darksource. We need much more creative material on this site, and Lex has provided it here. It's an awesome first section, and way outside of the box. Keep it up! This is fabulous!
(10/10)
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