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What I Have Always Wanted
Author: A Secret Slut
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(Added on Mar 12, 2005)
(This month 50368 readers) (Total 64769 readers) |
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First time meeting with online Master....everything and more than everything she could have wanted. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Mar 18, 2005 |
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I generally am very distracted by this run-on style of writing that makes all the years I spent trying to learn and obey the rules of grammar meaningless. This story is no exception, since it lacks even one single shred of novelty. I'm sure that there are folks who could write a program that would produce something just like this piece of dead pseudo prose. I guess there must be an audience for this kind of material since this story is written and posted here at least once every other week by different authors using different titles. For those who enjoy this kind of stuff, this is fine, but for me I'll pass on any future installments. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
anguisette
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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I only partially agree with the previous reviews. This is a good start to a story, with a promising storyline that I would like to see expanded. However, it's very hard for me to read something this packed with grammatical and spelling errors and not focus on those deficiencies. As well, there are repetitive word choices and phrases that don't let the reader "see" what is going on clearly. A good editor is a must when you're posting your own work. If you can't do it yourself, you need to find someone willing to do it for you. It's often the difference between mediocre work and something spectacular. (5/10)
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mastersall
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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What a great beginning... excellent characters and plot... very hot.. look forward to many more installments! (10/10)
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BDSgirl
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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mmmmmmmm nice. could do with some of that myself. (9/10)
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mkemse
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Mar 13, 2005 |
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great story, my only issue is that there are getting to be alot of stories with the same story line, but never the less it was great (9/10)
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wannabeXopsed
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Mar 13, 2005 |
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I loved this because it was so real, more chapters please. Thanks T (9/10)
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bisarah
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Mar 12, 2005 |
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this was a good story and quite well written. i would have liked to see a bit more of her being exposed in the bar, but ... that is just the voyeur in me coming out! LOL i hope you continue it. (8/10)
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Mad Lews
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Mar 12, 2005 |
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Nicely done! A well written piiece that is really hot. I can hardly wait for the rest of the story. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
ASecretSlut
(Edit) (Mar 16, 2005)
- Thanks for your review of my short story.
I've never written anything before and just wanted to write my fantasy, I'm really glad you enjoyed it and took the time to say so......
Apologies to all for the spelling and grammatical errors.....I guess I wasn't making enough of an effort........
shall try harder on part 2.
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