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Motel Convention
Author: Pallidan
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(Added on Aug 17, 2005)
(This month 52946 readers) (Total 64380 readers) |
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A motel clerk watches an elderly black lady check in with her white slavegirl and wonders what it would be like. She decides to try it. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (4.5/10) |
Average
Rating: (4/10) |
Highest
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Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Aug 19, 2005 |
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I have to agree with Lakewood's assessment. The author needs to proof read his work. If English is not his native language then he needs to find a proof reader. He writes some good stories yet others he just writes poorly. (4/10)
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Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Aug 19, 2005 |
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This is indeed typical of the massive amount of stuff that this author has spewed onto this site. In the first paragraph, we are introduced to an "elderly black lady" ("in her early 30s") and a "young blonde" ("in her 40s"). Later, we are shown that Pallidan still has not grasped the concept of adding 's to a noun to form a possessive and reminded that he seems to think "Owwllll" is the same as "Oww!!!!!" And, as far as plot, characterization, and wit are concerned, once again, we are treated to the same old pile of steaming drivel. Though he is not the worst writer here, IMO the only thing worth reading about a Pallidan story is the synopsis (which is often deceptively good). (1/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 17, 2005 |
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on par with your other stories (7/10)
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