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The Capture and Training of Aryana
Author: phantontears
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(Added on Feb 24, 2006)
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aryana is hitching when picked up by a seemingly harmless young man, who abducts her and makes her his vulnerable slave |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 30, 2007 |
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my type of story, a little bit of everything, good job can't wait to see more (8/10)
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A Girl Named Me
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Mar 5, 2006 |
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A diamond in the rough, this story has great potential to be a phenomenal work of erotica. Like previous reviewers state, break up the paragraphs. Elaborate, delve into each character's psyche, add more detail to their interchanges. Keep going! Definitely want to see more! (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Feb 27, 2006 |
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Others have covered the minor problems. I shall wait to read other chapters be for rating the story any higher (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
slutsteph
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Feb 26, 2006 |
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Yes, girl agrees the paragraphs would make easier reading, but the plot is exciting and she looks forward to the next chapter! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Very good story. More paragraphs would've made this more readable though. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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This needs to be edited -- the interminable
paragraphs divided and, particularly, the
dialogue broken out. The setup is nothing
really new, but let's see how the story
progresses now. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Nice... looking forward for the next part ??? (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Nicely told overall, a few areas might be unbelievable at the face, but it fits the story. An old plot, with an interesting start.
Hope there's more! (8/10)
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laursie
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Feb 24, 2006 |
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very simple but if you are into this subject very entertaining. Good job. (10/10)
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