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A Harem Girl
Author: Karen Kay
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(Added on Sep 14, 2006)
(This month 53419 readers) (Total 68359 readers) |
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Husband owes a lot of money gambling and pays back the debt using his wife. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Dundee
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Sep 16, 2006 |
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Good attempt but the spelling and grammatical errors were distracting. Also, a few more details would have been added a little 'flava' to it. Good try though! The story idea was great and that's what attracted me to reading it.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 15, 2006 |
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Karen: a few suggestions. First, an editor might help you catch little spelling demons like spelling whores "whore's". Second, comments by the author (like your little thanks at the end) belong in the synopsis, not in the story proper.
Finally: this is a pretty good start to a story. I'd love to read more; maybe "Harem Girl, the next day",if you have nothing to add to this piece. (7/10)
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