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Slave Wife
Author: Rocky
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(Added on Nov 14, 2006)
(This month 330431 readers) (Total 491344 readers) |
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A married couple\'s adventures after the husband discovers his wife\'s need to be dominated, degraded and abused. Story codes may change as the plot thickens. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
darwin
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Jun 17, 2015 |
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I really enjoyed how this story got started. The sequence that begins with “Go answer the door and bring my dinner to me, bitch!” and ends with “It was a girl” is amazing! For me, this story would have been a 10 if the protagonist were a little less harsh. This author has probably moved on since this story was posted a decade ago, but for me it's still a classic. (8/10)
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ALLAHHAVEMERCY
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Jun 24, 2011 |
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Don't get me wrong, the story is great. you should read it, you should like the story, and if you are telling that you weren't highly aroused after reading the first few chapters, well I don't believe you. The author is very talented and has commanding mastery of the english language. given the cesspool of bad authors on online porn, it really is a gem.
But the problem is that the story becomes fulsome, cloying and just embarrassing after the 4th chapter. Not embarrassing in a good way, but the kind of embarrassing like reading a cheap romance novel embarrassing. I get it. It's every male fantasy to have females slaves like that, but after the the first 3 chapters, which has taken to such extremes, the author seems to have run of ideas and has to resort to sentimentality.
Maybe not comparable to some of the best , this author is still certainly is in the top notch group, and this story, while has many shortcomings, is certainly a very enjoyable read. I couldn't rank this story any higher because there are other stories out there by others that are just really out much much better than this one, like stellar stories, comparable to classics written by geniuses. Maybe my standard is too high. If this story was published on some less talented other sites, it definitely could receive a 10. Good job.
BTW I just want to add, if you actually put a dildo up your wife's ass and made her go through TSA, I am pretty sure she will end up in Gitmo.
I also like that you use a lot of SAT words, helping me with my SAT which is coming next month. (8/10)
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Chuckdom19
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Dec 9, 2008 |
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Some serious progress here, with a good story and potential for some long lasting fun. refreshing the early chapter helped a great deal. Lots of directions this story can go even yet, but watch out for the old cliches like blowing the pizza guy, for example. Work on fresh ideas to humiliate her. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 6, 2007)
- Thanks for the encouraging words. I am working on at least two more chapters...one is nearly done, but I'm still fleshing out exactly how things are going to happen beyond that.
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kymaster
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Dec 8, 2008 |
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very good..she got off easier than she should have. (7/10)
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cece3457
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Jan 11, 2008 |
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although this girl would like to hear more about the other slave and her master...this was very well written and very believable (8/10)
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steph2004ster
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Nov 7, 2007 |
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Thank you for continuing the story. gyrl prefers this theme with more nonconsensual aspects, but the body modification and tattooing are very juicey. How about another story totally nc? Thanks. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 10, 2007)
- I don't know about an entire story that's completely nc, but I'm working on a chapter of "Confessions of a Slaver" that should be something along those lines. I'm not sure when I'll get it finished, though...I have to be in the right frame of mind, and those times seem to be coming less frequently.
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DJC
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Mar 22, 2007 |
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I agree with those who have stated the stories here are "fiction" and therefore should be enjoyed as such. I liked how you pushed the humiliation factor. It's hard to describe just how hard it is for a submissive to accept humiliation and/or degradation and still get excited. Keep writing Rocky. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Mar 23, 2007)
- Thank you for the encouraging comments. I am continuing to work on this story as well as my other unfinished works, but it seems that time and desire (I have to be in a certain state of mind) haven't been there at the same time lately. I promise I will continue with the story, and hope that the formatting problems some are experiencing are resolved soon.
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daiquiri
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Mar 14, 2007 |
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Unfortunately, whichever keyboard you're using doesn't send the version of English you anticipated. I haven't actually read it, as I was so bored with the spelling and typo mistakes, I thought it futile. I absolutely respect and thank any author who has sent anything in, so thank you, but sort out the text and I'll review it. D (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2007)
- Others have complained of similar problems, however, it shows up fine on my computer. The only time I had an issue was when I accessed the story using a browser other than IE, and then it appeared to be formatting codes. I submitted the first chapter in generic text, .doc format, as well as html, and regardless of the format, some people see it fine and others don't. I have even created chapters on different computers, and the problem seems to continue. I wish I knew what the solution was.
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Rocky
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2007)
- Others have complained of similar problems, however, it shows up fine on my computer. The only time I had an issue was when I accessed the story using a browser other than IE, and then it appeared to be formatting codes. I submitted the first chapter in generic text, .doc format, as well as html, and regardless of the format, some people see it fine and others don't. I have even created chapters on different computers, and the problem seems to continue. I wish I knew what the solution was.
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Lionheart61
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Jan 6, 2007 |
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Don't let anyone try to tear your story down. It was a very enjoyable read. I will be looking forward to seeing more chapters. Especially with the other couple. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jan 6, 2007)
- Thanks for the encouragement. I have a couple of more chapters drafted up, and an ending in mind, but don't know when I'll get them finished and posted.
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rainbow001
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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I see the same formatting issues that everyone does and I don't know what to tell you about them. That said it's your story and I hope that you continue to tell it. If it's to fast for some, they have the choice not to read it.
I have always found it interesting that the one's that comment about the grammer or the pace or the fact that it's not real don't have one single story up on this site. If their english skills or story telling expertise is so good let them write, post and get torn up.
You have a great start and don't listen to critics, you tell us the story that's in your head. Hoping to read more soon. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2006)
- Thanks for the encouraging comments. I've contacted the site administrator about the formatting problem in the hopes that a solution can be found. Since you apparently read it after my third attempt (the first was uploaded in .doc format, the second in .txt, and the third as an html file), whatever is happening is something I can't figure out how to fix. As far as I know, it's never happened with any other of my stores, which I've uploaded as .txt or .doc files.
I can't make any promises, as there are bills to be paid and my work is taking up mmost of my waking hours right now, but I have a couple more chapters drafted and just need to spend some time finalizing them before I submit them as finished products. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far.
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| Reviewer:
FootSlaveE
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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Great Start. I hope you are inspired to work on Sissy Husband too :-) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
FootSlaveE
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2006)
- Woops...Meant to say Sissy Stepdad...
- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2006)
- S'okay...I knew which story you were talking about. I've got some stuff outlined already; it's just a matter of putting the right words together so that I paint an understandable picture of what is in my mind. I have no idea when I'll post more, but hope I can in the near future.
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Rocky
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2006)
- S'okay...I knew which story you were talking about. I've got some stuff outlined already; it's just a matter of putting the right words together so that I paint an understandable picture of what is in my mind. I have no idea when I'll post more, but hope I can in the near future.
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J's blu
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Dec 1, 2006 |
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i had the whole format problem thingo too, BUT, i can read past it. story is good! next chapter please. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2006)
- I'm still not sure what the problem is with the formatting issue. The only time I've had issues is when I tried reading it using Netscape. I've checked it on three different computers, and all three versions I posted looked okay to me. I checked it by opening both the individual chapter file and the html "whole story" link,and each time it looked fine. Sure wish I knew what I could do to make it more readable for everyone else!
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oldwino
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Dec 1, 2006 |
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Good start. My gf will love it if it gets nastier. (8/10)
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c-black
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Nov 30, 2006 |
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I _really_ enjoyed the story for its content. Let's all be honest and admit, sure, realism is right out the window -- but, seriously, who cares? I'm pretty sure this site already has a tag for "realistic" and this story doesn't have it, so I am convinced that Rocky has done exactly as he/she should. So, for those of us who enjoy a story for its crude, vulgar sexual violence, this is a great story.
That said, the text issues (as noted by others) _greatly_ detracts. No one should EVER be allowed to use MS Word to make websites, it is the most hideously evil invention known to man.
PLEASE finish the story, it's off to a fantastic start.
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2006)
- I'm really not sure what to do about the formatting problems. I originally submitted it in .doc format, got complaints about the formatting, resubmitted it in .txt, same complaints, and then in html...and now still same problems. I didn't have the problems others saw, so I'm not sure what's going on or what to do. Would .rtf format work better?
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Taoxx
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Nov 24, 2006 |
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I would really like to rate this story higher, but there are 2 things that make it impossible.
First is the horrbible format. Every sentence begins with an "A" and some letters even overlap.
Second is the "unprotected sex" thing. When he wanted his wife to do suchj a thing I couldn't identify with him anymore. No dom I can idenfity with would be so careless about his own and his slaves life and health.
But besides these points the story is really good. Continue and improve and I will adjust the rating. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 25, 2006)
- There seems to be a problem with how the story is formatted for some users. I posted it as a .doc file, and it appears fine to me, but apparently shows up differently for some users. When I post the next chapter (and at this point, I don't know when that is going to be), I'll resubmit Chapter 1 in html format, as one reviewer suggested. Regarding the unprotected sex, I thought my introduction explained that very well: This is a work of fiction, and in the world I've created here, the only risk from unprotected sex is pregnancy. There are no STDs, and nobody dies from having sex.
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cala
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Nov 16, 2006 |
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This story ought to be subtitled Woman Hating Husband. There's nothing to do with slavery here, just misogynistic abuse. If that's your thing, you'll lap this up! The most entertaining aspect is the comedy grammar. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
ella
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2006)
- It is pretty ironic that the person who wrote this comment actually gave "On the Table" one of the highest ratings... Speak of the hate and abuse. Or something that would turn you off... Quite comic, irony aside. Lap it up.
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cala
(Edit) (Nov 18, 2006)
- Ella, this page is for the review of one particular story. If you wish to take my review personally and feel the need to respond on a personal level, kindly use the PM system.
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ella
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Nov 16, 2006 |
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I loved this story - great beginning, very exciting and believable. As far as some comments here, I think they are very unfair.
As far as the fact that the wife does everything she is told - it is perfectly logical. She made her decision and there is no turning back once you agree to be a slave. Something I know from experience.
Her husband has the right to test her obedience and determination in any way he pleases and as far as I know there's no manuals or strict rules to follow on how to break your slave in. Every Master is different and so is every slave or submissive.
I think you have done a great job, Rocky, and I certainly hope that you will not be discouraged by some of the comments here. I would be delighted to read more. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 18, 2006)
- Thank you for the encouragement, ella. What some people apparently don't understand is that this is a work of fiction. There is a possibility that I'll revise the first chapter; I haven't re-read it to see what the grammar issues are that others have complained about, but perhaps I can identify and fix those. I may also revise the plot somewhat so that it turns into more of a revenge-type story.
This project was originally taken on in an effort to revive my own interest in two unfinished stories I've posted here. The first few reviews pretty much put me in a "wny bother?" sort of funk. Comments such as yours are countering that. I still don't know if I have the time, energy and desire to continue with the other stories, but perhaps it will happen.
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H Dean
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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All mistakes aside, and there were plenty, this story lacks any sort of logic. A wife wants to be a slave so her husband throws her into the deep end and she does exactly as told. It doesn't work. It seems as if the author was in too big of a hurry to get to the "good stuff" to really offer up a story for the story. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2006)
- I'd appreciate a little more than "there were plenty" mistakes...care to be more specific?
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H Dean
(Edit) (Nov 20, 2006)
- I will quote a paragraph of yours for answer as to the mistakes:
"ASir,@ she responded, AIt came as a shock to me, too. I never realized...@ Her voice broke. She=d never called me Asir@ before in her life. AI never realized how much I could enjoy reading and seeing those things. The stories about women forced to... .to humiliate themselves, to do all those things. Please? Please may I be your slave?@ She was nearly in tears, but I still didn’t believe her. I had to call her bluff, but how? I thought about it for a moment before responding. "
Such mistakes as were in this paragraph abound in this story. I would suggest you put your story through a spell-check program before submission.
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Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 23, 2006)
- I submit that the errors you describe aren't with the text, but either the site or whatever program you're using to read with. They don't appear when I bring the story up, and they don't exist in the original text. It seems the problem is similiar to the problem with certain punctuation marks in some story summaries.
I'd be interested to see who else is having this problem, and whether it exists in other stories. My upload was in .doc format, so perhaps this is causing the problem and I should resubmit in .txt?
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H Dean
(Edit) (Nov 23, 2006)
- The files are converted to html files after you submit them. However, I have submitted my stories in .doc and not had any trouble. I now submit them in html so the site moderators don't have to convert them. Finally, I have looked at your story with more than one computer and the errors are always there. Something may have gone wrong in the conversion - I don't know. But I would recomend submitting them in html.
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Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 24, 2006)
- Thanks for the advice. I'll probably do that when I'm ready to upload Chapter 2, and resumit Chapter 1 in html format at that time.
A question for you: Did the updated file that is now on the board still showing the same issues? I see it clearly, without any of the coding problems...but then, I saw the first version the same way.
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H Dean
(Edit) (Nov 24, 2006)
- Yes, it does show the same problems.
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Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 25, 2006)
- Thanks. It still shows up fine for me, but I just uploaded another Chapter 1 revision. This time I saved it in .html format using MS Word. Please let me know if it worked...assuming they update the site anytime soon!
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Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 26, 2006)
- I may have just figured out the problem. I opened the story in netscape, and saw the issues you're referring to. It still shows up fine using internet explorer, so I'm wondering...are you using a browser other than MSIE to view it?
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H Dean
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2006)
- I am using IE, Mozilla standard and Firebird...it all shows the same way.
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masteralex_48_49
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Your grammer needs improving and your story line jumps around a lot. Do kep on writing this story has promise
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GarrickBailley
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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dick snot...unsafe sex..."not my fault" etc etc....stupid. "If you want to be my slave go have unprotected sex with a stranger and show me his cum in your pussy when I get home". Man this is fucked..that totally turned me off. To top it off, the grammar was like you were writing with a keyboard that was not english based...that was also a major turn off. This story needs a miracle to make it readable. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2006)
- Interesting comments, though I can't figure out what your problem with the grammar is. However, I'm probably just going to have the story removed from the site since it's not being well-received.
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mkemse
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Nov 14, 2006 |
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nice start, can't wait for more (8/10)
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