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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 6, 2010 |
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While Lewis Chappelle keeps coming up with good ideas, he sometimes seems to have a hard time putting them to paper in a convincing way.
The ideas about the challenges are very good, and the content of the challenges is great, but the mix of fairly simple tasks (like dressing sexy) with stuff that will take days to weeks (the fabrication of the waistband and bra) isn't well thought out.
I feel that Lewis should have altered his build-up of the story, because now, some stuff takes way too long and other things are rushed.
Also --and this happens often-- Lewis Chappelle jumps little parts of a paragraph. Like, right at the start when Chip carries Ann to the bed, all of a sudden --without Ann being laid down-- she, Ann, spreads her legs and Chip nibbles on her clit... I had both people doing the most complicated of body twists in my imagination --hey, I think in images, what can I say-- before I gathered they were on the bed already.
Chappelle's stories are littered with these little jumps --like there's a few frames missing in a movie. A lot of the time these little skippings don't bother that much, but often they do.
I know that sometimes, when the inspiration flows, one must hurry to chop down what springs to mind, seize the moment before the moment's gone. But re-reading a text to fill in some blanks could do wonders.
"Submissive Sensibility" was yummy nevertheless.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
oldwino
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Jan 17, 2007 |
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Very hot story just keeps getting better. Look forward to more. Hope to read of much more public exhibition and humiliation. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 6, 2007 |
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you need a synopsis to draw readers in, without knowing what the storyi s about readers may bot read it (5/10)
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