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Unlucky girl gets interrogated by factory guards
Author: nimporte quoi
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(Added on Jan 6, 2007)
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Tove had a bad day at work. The marketing presentation which was important for her future career and which she had spent a long time to prepare, was badly received. With all her hopes dashed she is already on her way back home when factory guards call her for an interrogation which soon proves to be very unpleasant for her, |
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| Reviewer:
oldwino
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Jan 17, 2007 |
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Ssome minor prose problems. They were easy to overlook because of the high quality original content. Hope this is only the first of many increaenly nastier tales of Tov. (9/10)
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chksng19
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Jan 9, 2007 |
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Can I guess that English is not your native tongue? The problem is not so much with spelling (now perfect) as it is with sentence construction.
The story itself is wonderful: I'm hoping strongly that there will be subsequent chapters or a sequel.
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
nimporte quoi
(Edit) (Jan 19, 2007)
- Your guess is right and I am planning to upload more in a while.
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Jan 6, 2007 |
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This story could have been proofed one more time and I would have awarded it a 10.
The story is highly readable and interesting. Somewhat more originality than some stories.
The the cool quiet tone of the dialog and matter-of-fact dialog renders the frustrating humiliation of the young woman exceptionally erotic. The situation is developed to a high level of erotic power: then suddenly drops out cold. The story is ripe for a sequel.
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
nimporte quoi
(Edit) (Jan 7, 2007)
- Hi,
I ran the spell-checker against it and revised a few sections. Please check and let me know if that hits the spot now. It's my first attempt at writing stories.
Cheers
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 6, 2007 |
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was worth the time to read, would like to see if you add more (7/10)
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