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FETISH VIDEO INC.
Author: J Lewis
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(Added on Aug 7, 2008)
(This month 109271 readers) (Total 174983 readers) |
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Two women on vacation in Florida are offered modeling photo sessions. Without realizing the severity of the offer, they accept and find themselves facing extreme treatment from a BDSM club. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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No formatting problems on my side (except for chapter two, which was transformed into one big block of text --even when copy-pasted to notepad) and the only 'underscore' I saw was Chuckdom19's six rating...
Story seems like it served as a blue-print for the later posted "Model For Hire", which is similarly themed and also sports our dear Jodi as main canvas.
Liked "Fetish Video Inc." a lot too, because of -again- that eerie feeling J is able to put into most of his stories; a feeling of dread, of dark forboding.
I also like J Lewis' ability to make 'standard fodder' read like a novelty, thanks to that style of long sentences which carry tits and tats of information in these short, expressive bursts.
Others might find those sentences overlong. I don't. Maybe because I think a bit in the same way in which J Lewis writes.
Without the constant rattling of chains and the whipcracks, that is.
Adding a point out of sheer enthusiasm. And to level-out Chuckdom's rating to that of decency...
JJ (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
DesertDom
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Oct 16, 2008 |
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Entertaining premise. Would be higher if the formating was done properly and spell checking was done. (8/10)
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Chuckdom19
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Aug 19, 2008 |
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The story is not bad, an interesting concept, quite harsh.
But it needs to be formatted AS ENGLISH. All those pauses between lines make it nearly impossible to read. And why the underscore? That makes it worse still!! Find an editor who can assist you, reformat it and resubmit, please. Your scores will go waaaaay up, and you'll draw many more readers. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
CrazedDog
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Aug 9, 2008 |
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Could there be more? (8/10)
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