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Emily
Author: Thom_G
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(Added on Dec 1, 2010)
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Emily finds herself in a difficult situation. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 28, 2011 |
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I was torn between '7' and '8', but finally decided the lack of heat was compensated for by the quality of the writing.
And fuck the Yankees!
EDIT: With the posting of part two, and the multiplication of 'wrong word' misspellings, and upon further reflection in regard to 'DDD' busts, rating reduced. (6/10)
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tjlewis132
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Dec 10, 2010 |
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Thom... Thom... Thom! A little advice, 'Ol JJ is a prolific reviewer and can eat your lunch. His reviews are more entertaining then most stories. Actually, he was rather generous with your tale. And, as far as wanting a 'wanna be writer' to toss in a review, here goes. Use spell check, and re-read a couple times before submitting a story. Bunch of silly mistakes. That being said,the story's okay, just. Now, I have a few stories posted myself, and with my share of mistakes, but then, a rather strong following at times so I'm doing something right. Thing is, I don't get pissed and make silly demands of a reviewer of one of my stories. What's that old saying? Can't stand the heat, get out of the kitchen? Just hope your stories draw enough readers to receive reviews.... J LEWIS (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Thom_G
(Edit) (Dec 11, 2010)
- J-
Thanks for the comments. Just writing my own particular fantasies...I wouldn't review one of your stories and criticize the size of a female characters breasts, you don't find it ridiculous that someone might do so? It's a sex-story, not War and Peace!
As to my response to JJ's review, I demanded nothing...I simply commented that his position is a convenient one to hold. I'm not pissed, angry, or otherwise miffed at his initial review, simply amused at his pretentious attitude toward someone posting a story he read for free. If he didn't prefer the image of the female character, he is free to not read it again.
Bring on the heat!
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tjlewis132
(Edit) (Dec 12, 2010)
- Thom... Just a final response. My position was there's no need to attack a reviewer, which apparently you don't realize you did. (Something about he won't be writing a story himself, seeming to refer he's incapable) Actually, as I stated, lots of his reviews are better then the stories themselves, so I'm quite sure he's more then capable. That being said, your writings' appear to be as good or better then most on the site and with a little more effort could get you the reviews you're obviously striving for. No hard feeling's, just constructive criticism... J LEWIS
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JimmyJump
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Dec 4, 2010 |
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Have to agree with Curtis, except that I encountered no compensation for the lack in heat.
So, I would have gone for a seven then, but I got stuck at six because of the intellectually challenging sentence "...()...with the greatest pair of natural DDD tits I have ever laid eyes on...()..."
Those words not only speak of a rather juvenile imagination, but also tell us that the narrator lives in Megaboobily land, where tripple-lettered tits seemingly grow on trees.
Thom G better get out of his and deflate his jugs to a less custom's man attention-grabbing size. I know, it's all a fantasy and the author has the right to his own.
But it's not my fault the author has half a billion brothers who all seem to have the same fantasy. To add to my dismay, half of those half billion are wannabe writers...
Me, I like tits in all shapes and sizes. I never shared this melon-choly fantasy (maybe that's why I never had acne) and thus am getting a tad tired of reading the same sizes over and over again... although I must admit that this extra D is a rarity.
JJJ (oops) (6/10)
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- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2010)
- Ah, seems you try to turn things around to your own advantage, heh?
My imagination probably goes beyond what you would be able to come up with in ten lifetimes, hence the fact that you have to fall back on a standard procedure and (I'm repeating myself) puberescent wet dreams to come up with what you call a story.
I like the writing, by the way, just not the content.
I'd say, expand --and try to use-- your imagination instead of dragging DDD tits into the equation, because, lest you already noticed, a woman (imaginary or in the flesh) is more than a couple of boobs, whatever size they are...
Also, I didn't say that DDD Breast were intellectually challenging, but rather the sentence in which you describe your 'character'...
To finish, you seem rather certain that I would be Inclined to read your future scribblings...
And what the hell are "BIT TITS"..? You mean you gonna follow my lead and deflate the lot?
JJ
- Replied by:
Thom_G
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2010)
- I'm sorry Jimmy, that the characters in my story do not more closely match your rather narrow view of what a sex-fantasy story character ought to look like. As to your supposition that a pair of DDD tits are "intellectually challenging", feel free not to read any future writings I might post...female characters will most likely always have BIG TITS. They're not meant to stimulate your brain...
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Thom_G
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2010)
- Well Jimmy, glad you appreciate the writing at least. Perhaps in the future you'll be kind enough to grace the rest of us "wannabe writers" with some of your own work, and not simply comments on ours.
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JimmyJump
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2010)
- Again, read what I wrote: I said that YOU have half a billion brothers of which a truckload are wannabe writers.
Now, since I was talking about your brothers-in-arms, that doesn't include you, now does it...
Furthermore, people should learn to read between the lines and don't go apeshit all the time when someone has the 'audacity' to be a tad critical about their writings.
And why should I start writing? Because others can't or are no good at it?
You do a good enough job. Just try to avoid cliché's as huge as the breast you describe.
JJ
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Thom_G
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2010)
- A convenient position to hold, being only a reviewer (critical or not), and not someone who actually puts something out there. Perhaps one day you'll put your amazing imagination, and MSWord, to work, but I doubt it.
Again, terribly sorry that Emily doesn't fit your mold. Unfortunately, I probably won't be writing about female characters who aren't curvy in all the right places.
Thanks for your input, the constructive parts are indeed appreciated.
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2010)
- Glad that you showed a lot of your little self in these replies. If there's more, please take it up through PM.
JJ
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