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Baby Steps
Author: torrid girl
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(Added on Sep 1, 2011)
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Daddy's little girl is late and has some serious explaining to do about her wardrobe. Daddy is finally ready to make her into a woman. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
sulkon
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May 19, 2012 |
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Someone posted that he would like to read a prequel to that story. Well, I'd love to read a continuation ;) Nicely written. (8/10)
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Michael247
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Nov 27, 2011 |
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How the hell did I miss this when it came out?
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Gosh, as a reviewer and critic, there isn't much to say here. First of all, I want to point out that writing in present tense is damned hard. It occasionally works (think "Hunger Games" by Suzanne Collins) but I can now give another example: Baby Steps by Torrid Girl. How's that for impressive. The author does a superb job in keeping things entertaining, on track, and relative within the present tense format. Not many authors can do that well. It's always awkward and it takes talent to pull away from that awkwardness.
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Grammar was excellent. I didn't notice any errors, though admittedly it could be because I was rather wrapped up in the story. To be honest, I'm not all that much into incest, but this particular story had me hard almost instantly. The sexual tension was right on, things progressed at an excellent pace, and even the climax and resolution were well timed, interesting, and full of promise.
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Description was also really good, especially in the minor actions of the characters. The phone conversation at the beginning was masterful. Every emotion is brought to life and gives a depth and complexity to the characters. Such vivid description eliminates the need for introductions. We are immediately brought into this sick little perversion and enjoy it.
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The only thing I don't understand is why Daddy kept ropes in his daughter's night stand if he wasn't already screwing her brains out. Obviously he's spanked her before, but clearly the sexual intercourse was new. So why the ropes? Yep. There's my ONLY critical issue.
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This is an amazing story and hopefully Torrid Girl never starts SELLING her stories or I'll have some horrible competition.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (10/10)
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- Replied by:
torrid girl
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2011)
- thanks for the great feedback, glad you enjoyed :) If I could address the ropes? There are a few spots where it is mentioned that she has been taught to suck his cock.. as well as him checking to make sure that her virginity is intact. Voila! Ropes!
I have no clue how to go about selling... so you're safe.. for now :)
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| Reviewer:
libco
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Nov 26, 2011 |
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This has become one of my go to stories. Great stuff and wow hot! (9/10)
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niora
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Sep 14, 2011 |
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Excellent story; kept me in the action from beginning to end; would like to see a flashback story on how it all began and her first experiences with oral sex and bondage. Keep the parts coming asap. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
torrid girl
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Sep 11, 2011 |
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Wow, that's one of the nicest things I've heard yet! Thank you very much, I'm so glad you enjoyed! What DO you find especially arousing? I'm always looking for new ideas. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Ingwit
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Sep 11, 2011 |
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I was really, really surprised when I read this.
Your writing is very good. It's shockingly good. When I click on a story here, I know that most of the time I'm going to find something that might be okay to get off to, but will probably be horrible written.
I'm used to ignoring the terrible prose and horrible grammar and awful dialogue - because, eh, the idea is hot and I'm horny, I'm not going to be picky.
See, the things you write about aren't even things I find especially arousing, but the WAY you write about them is so good that I deeply enjoy reading regardless. You've got talent! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
torrid girl
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2011)
- Wow, that's one of the nicest things I've heard yet! Thank you very much, I'm so glad you enjoyed! What DO you find especially arousing? I'm always looking for new ideas!
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| Reviewer:
ksst
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Sep 9, 2011 |
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Very sick. I enjoyed it. Great dramatic tension. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
torrid girl
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2011)
- tyty :) Love the feedback!
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| Reviewer:
mrfaja01
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Sep 5, 2011 |
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Best Incest story I have read on BDSM LIB. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
torrid girl
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2011)
- thank you so much :)
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